She waits for him to take her hands,
And pull her from the depths,
So she can all but drown
Caught within my seclusive moment and lost in between the intervals of time
Expressed through my poetry, written in these lines
I think of you my love, I dream of you, your scent lingers like perfectly aged wine
My question yields no answer, will our fate ever entwine?
You stand there with your necklace of sadness and tears of pearl.
Come to me, drown within me. I shall take them all.
Those scars speak of vicious maul.
Melt now into these arms, worry not about the fall.
Suspended in an atmosphere of doubt,
His words echo in the darkness.
Quiet responses drip golden residue
As she reaches for his heart.
Floating in a sea of upside down people
With backward, wall-mounted heads,
She called out, fearing for her life,
And in a flash, he was there to help.
Wrapped safely in his sweet words,
She collapsed under the weight of her thoughts.
This is another collab I did with (SUGAR AND BLACKBERRIES)
This is really beautiful! You got some great lines in here: “lost in between the intervals of time”; “necklace of sadness and tears of pearl”; “As she reaches for his heart.
Floating in a sea of upside down people” Great piece!
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oh I am so glad to have you here. Thank you my friend. 🙂
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You are so welcome!
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This is great work!
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Thank you my friend. 🙂
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You are welcome.
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Man, this is beautiful. It flowed perfectly. This is the second collab I have read here, you are very good at them.
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Hi Andrew. Initially, this wasn’t meant to be a collab. We used these stanzas in our conversations. I thought it wouldn’t be fair just leaving them there. So, I tried to arrange them and here it is. 🙂
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That makes this even better. Great idea to use them.
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That means so much my friend. 🙂
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I really like the variety and inspiration I find when I come here.
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haha are you kidding me?? I can do that to you, to that person who writes novels. You are so humble and so kind. You have been giving me so much of motivation. Looks like I’ll always be in your debt. I’ll try paying them in installments. 🙂
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Lol. Just give me your friendship as I pledge mine to you.
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This is a beautiful collaboration Ankit, I took a little trip to “Sugar and Blackberries” to leave my message there. A lovely blog as well.
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Thank you Holly. She isn’t as active as I am on WP, but she’ll be very pleased to see your message. You have a wonderful evening/night.
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You too Ankit!
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Great collaboration. Loved it
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Thanks for that bro, btw your comment was marked as spam. You should see if its happening in other places as well.
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Oh thank you Ankit. Let me check with other as well. Thanks for pointing it out
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you’re welcome Shantanu 🙂
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Beautiful and poignant, Ankit. Had to give it a second read. 🙂 Keep writing!
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Thanks Myrtle. I appreciate your double read.
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“You stand there with your necklace of sadness and tears of pearl.
Come to me, drown within me. I shall take them all.
Those scars speak of vicious maul.
Melt now into these arms, worry not about the fall.”
How beautiful^^. I love this ^^
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Thank you so much for this. Good to see you again 🙂
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yeah^^. You re welcome^^. I ll stay around from now!
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Good to know.
I was wondering, what should I call you?
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My name you mean 🙂 . You can just call me Antsa 🙂
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Okay. 🙂
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Beautiful poetic collaboration!… The atmosphere is so well depicted… and feelings seems to pull her down… until he shows up and saves her… I love it! ❤ Thank you… All the best! 🙂
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Thank you for this insight, it means so much. I appreciate your love. 🙂
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Once again very beautiful! “Come to me, drown within me. I shall take them all.” loved this line……how do you collab in poetry? I mean do you write together, or you write separately and then bring it together? Just curious…..as I feel it is not easy doing so when it comes to passionate poetry such as this.
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First I want to thank you for giving it such a nice read, and leaving this comment after that.
Last time I did a collab, it was with Graci, she came with the idea. she also had a picture that she took. and with a little briefing, It was done.
This time, this wasnt supposed to be a collab. We were just exchanging these lines in our conversation. There are many other lines. We picked a few of our lines to paint this beautiful story. 🙂
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That is truely amazing….magic created through little conversations!
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kinda.
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😍 Wow! This collaboration is so profound Ankit. So much emotions and full of heart. You two can really create magic on your collab. Great job to both of you! 🙂
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Really? Thank you so much Graci. I’m so delighted to see those praises. 🙂
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Yes Ankit, maybe you and sugarandblackberries should do more collab together. Keep it up! And how’s the music composition going? I hope it’s doing great? 🙂
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That is so nice of you to say that. Im sure we’ll be doing more. My music composition is going well. Im working on my next. Thanks for asking Graci. You have a wonderful time ahead. 🙂
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You are welcome Ankit. I hope you had a wonderful weekend! 🙂
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Yes I did. I hope you had a happy family weekend as well. 🙂
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Impeccable now!
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Thanks for that 🙂
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OH GOOD LORD!!! This is so very beautiful….so rich and full. Amazing. Just amazing. You have such depth and when You and Your writer friends collaborate it is seamless…perfect blendings. And the picture is absolutely wonderful…there is so much there. Wow. Cheers and Thank You both!!! 🤗💖☀️
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Hi Katy, that just brought the biggest smile on my face. I would like to thank you on behalf of both of us. Double thanks.
The picture thanks you too. 🙂 😀 🙂 😀
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🤗💖☀️
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Lovely collab..great flow of words
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Thank you ESP. 🙂
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Expressed through my poetry, written in these lines I think of you my love, I dream of you, your scent lingers like perfectly aged wine My question yields no answer, will our fate ever entwine?
Ugh i love these lines! Speaks too much of love and fire. The question in the end of this stanza made it just more powerful. Great work! Great collab!!
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Thank you so much Apple. I appreciate your love so so much. 🙂
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Heartfelt, well described poetry. Amazing…
Sorry I’m reading this late. Was out of town 😊
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Thank you for reading. I hope everything is good. 🙂
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Yes. Everything is fine. Hope the same for you 😊
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This is so beautifully composed!
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Thank you for visiting.
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This was beautiful. The pain is so palpable here
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Thanks Pradita, such a nice comment. 🙂
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Welcome. You deserved it 👏
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Beautifully written.
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Thank you 🙂
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My pleasure..
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this was beautiful, I appreciate the time that you must have put into writing this poem.love your blog, and its always awesome to see other indian bloggers.i love your writing style!keep writing, and id love for you to check my blog out too:)
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🙂
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Beautiful!!
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Thanks
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